写英语作文，总是会不经意的蹦出一系列类似口语化的简单表述，于是就被阅卷老师认定为英语水平不那么高……为了让阅卷老师见识到我们的“真实水平”，着实需要下一番功夫，比如可以从把简单句变“高级”开始。
小编乱入
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形式“活” 起来
插入 在句中插入某些成分，起补充、说明作用。最明显的特征是被插入成分前后都用逗号隔开。
You and I are teenagers. It offers teenagers a chance. We can enjoy sports and learn about Chinese culture.
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It offers teenagers,like you and me, a chance to enjoy sports and learn about Chinese culture.
嵌入 在某一分句中嵌入另一分句，构成句中句。最常见的情况是：定语从句嵌入宾语从句中、感叹句嵌入宾语从句中、名词性从句嵌入强调句型中。
We are told something. We doubt whether it is true. We are in the habit of raising doubts. We can find the correct answer. We can learn more.
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If we are in the habit of raising doubtsas to whether what we are told is true, we can find the correct answer and learn more.
前置 将正常词序下通常较晚出现的成分移至句首，使之处于突出的位置从而受到特殊的强调，这种手段为前置。
I really want to obtain this precious opportunity. I will be able to improve my organizational ability, communication skills as well as my confidence in speaking English in public by offering my service.
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I really want to obtain this precious opportunity because,byoffering my service, I will be able to improve my organizational ability, communication skills as well as my confidence in speaking English in public.
后置 在遣词造句时将最重要的内容置于句尾，使之处于突出地位，这种手段为后置。故造句时应避免头重脚轻，注意句子结构的匀称。在名词性从句中，借助it作形式主语或形式宾语，将真正的主语或宾语后置；在同位语从句中，主语太长而谓语太短，将同位语从句后置；使用全部倒装，将主语后置。
The test will enhance the examinee’s consciousness of health. On the contrary it will also be more likely to result in over anxiety. People all said that.
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It’s said thatthe test will enhance the examinee’s consciousness of health, but on the contrary it will also be more likely to result in over anxiety.
同位 对与之同位的名词或短语提供补充说明的成分称之为同位语，可以是一个词也可以是一个完整的句子。为表示同位概念，也可使用连接性状语namely / that’s / in other words / such as 等，还可使用破折号表示。
DNA test is a new technique. It is done by analyzing the saliva sample. It appears in the foreign medical industry.
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DNA test,a new technique, which is done by analyzing the saliva sample, appears in the foreign medical industry.
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内容 “实” 起来
遣词
01 词汇的升级
(1) I think that reading is important.
→ Ideemthat reading isessential /fundamental.
→ Iarguethat reading reallymatters /counts.
→ Imaintainthat reading iscrucial.
→ Iholdthat reading issignificant /primary / critical.
(2) We can look at this problem in many ways.
→ We canviewthis problem in manyfacets / aspects / respects.
02 单词和短语巧妙互用
(1) I think that reading is important.
→ Ihold the belief thatreadingplays an important role inour life.
→ Iharbor the opinion thatreading isof vital importance.
→ Ihold the position thatreadingmeans a great deal toour life.
→ Iam under the impression thatnothing is morecrucial to our life thanreading.
→From my perspective, readingis toour lifewhatwateris tofish.
→As far as I am concerned,the importance ofreading to our lifecan never be exaggerated / denied / ignored / doubted.
(2) I will never forget the pleasant experience.
→ The pleasant experienceleaves a deep impression onme.
→ The pleasant experienceis deeply / firmly rooted inmy memory.
→ The pleasant experience willnever be fading from my mind / memory.
(3) I sincerely hope that you will consider my suggestions.
→ It is my sincere hope that you willtakemy proposalsinto account /consideration.
(4) Quite a few things caused the traffic accident.
→ Quite a few thingstriggeredthe traffic accident.
→ Quite a few thingsgave rise tothe traffic accident.
→ Quite a few thingslead to / result inthe traffic accident.
(5) I love reading.
→ Iam crazy about / fond of / into /feel likereading.
→ Ipossess great interest inreading.
→ Readingexerts a tremendous fascination onme.
→ Iam obsessed withreading.
→ Iam captured byreading.
03短语的升级
(1)try to do sth→take pains to do sth→do one’s utmost to do sth→exhaust every effort in one’s power to do sth→spare no effort to do sth→ go all out to do sth
If I am lucky enough to be chosen to become a volunteer, I willdo my utmost toserve the children in the remote areas.I willspare no effort tobuild the hope into a bridge between the children in the remote areas and the volunteers like me.In order to make it a better place for us and children, I willexhaust every effort in my power.
(2)have to→be forced to do sth→be obliged to do sth→ have no choice but to do sth→have no alternative but to do sth
Some poor students have to do some part-time jobs to earn money in order to continue their education.Somepoverty-strickenstudentshave no choice but to dosome part-time jobs to earn money in order to continue their education.
造句
01吸引眼球的定语从句
找准信息的最佳结合点，在某一关键信息词后接定语从句，以此将简单句压缩，实现巧妙 “嫁接”。
（1）Chaplin was a famous director. He directed a number of films, and most of them were silent. They were popular with people.
→ Chaplin,whowas adistinguisheddirector, directeda sea offilms,most of whichwere silent andappealed topeople of all ages.
(2) After all the guests got up and left, half of the dishes were left untouched, and this result was out of my expectation.
→After all the guests got up and left, half of the dishes were left untouched,whichwas out of my expectation.
(3) Take Abraham Lincoln, for example. He was born in a poor family, and only received a limited education. Yet through his painstaking effort, he changed not only his own fate but also the history of America. Even to this day, Lincoln is regarded as one of the most inspiring figures in the world.
→Take Abraham Lincoln,whowas born in a poor family, for example, he only received a limited education, but through his painstaking effort, he changed not only his own fate but also the history of America,whichalso made him one of the most inspiring figures in the world even to this day.→…but through his painstaking effort,not only didhe change his own fate,but he alsotransformed the history of America…
(4)The girl is spoken highly of, for her composition is well written.
→ The girl,whosecomposition is well written, is spoken highly of.
→The reason whythe girl is spoken highly ofis thather composition is well written.
→It isbecause her composition is well writtenthatthe girl is spoken highly of.
(5) In that picture, three students are sitting around the table. There are three books on it.
→Asis vividly shown in the picture, around the tableon whichare three books are seated three students.
→Aswe can see from the picture, around the tablewiththree books on it are seated three students.
02灵活好用的名词性从句
根据意义需要巧妙地将其中的一个简单句融为另一个简单句的句子成分，从而实现两个简单句的完美对接。
(1)He said a lot at the meeting. His words were very attractive.
→What he saidat the meeting was exceedingly appealing.
→It iswhat he said at the meetingthatwas exceedingly appealing.
(2)We fear fear.
→Whatwe have to fear is fear itself.
→It isfear itselfthatwe have to fear.
(3)Our women volleyball team had won the championship. The news encouraged us all greatly.
→The news thatour women volleyball team had won the championship encouraged us all greatly.
→Thatour women volleyball team had won the championship encouraged us all greatly.
→Itwas extremelyinspiringthatour women volleyball team had won the championship.
→ All of us were greatlyheartenedbythe news thatour women volleyball team had won the championship.
→Whatour women volleyball team had won greatlyheartenedus all.
→ All of us were greatlyinspiredbywhatour women volleyball team had won.
→It isthe newsthatour women volleyball team had won the championshipthatencouraged us all greatly.
(4)Not your money, but you interest me most.
→Whatinterests me most is not your money but you.
→It isnot your money, but youthatappeal to me most.
I love not your body, but your soul.
→WhatI love is not your body, but your soul.
→It isnot your body, but your soulthatI love.
03富有文采的状语从句
依据前后逻辑关系使用从属连词将简单句连接起来。注意要点间的关联，防止强拉硬扯。
(1)He heard the news. The Chinese women’s football team beat the US team. He was so happy that he could not go to sleep.
→When / Instantly / Immediately / Directlyhe heard the news that the Chinese women’s football team beat the US team, he was so happy that he could not go to sleep.
→(Upon / On) hearingthe news that the Chinese women’s football team beat the US team,so happy washethathe could not go to sleep.
→The moment /minute / instanthe heard the news that the Chinese women’s football team beat the US team,so happy washethathe could not go to sleep.
(2)If I had the chance, I would make donations to orphans eager to gain future success through learning.
→Given / Considering / Seeing thatI had the chance, I would make donations to orphans eager to gain future success through learning.
→Providing / Provided / Suppose / Supposing thatI had the chance, I would make donations to orphans eager to gain future success through learning.
→ I would make donations to orphans eager to gain future success through learningon condition thatI had the chance.
(3) Though he is a child, he is learned.
→Whilehe is a child, he is learned.
→Child as / thoughhe is, he is learned.
(3)All the fish in the river did not die out until the villagers realized how serious the problem is.
→Not untilall the fish in the river did die out did the villagers realize how serious the problem is.
→It is not untilall the fish in the river did die outthatthe villagers realized how serious the problem is.
04非谓语和“独立”是一家
(1)The teacher walked out of the lab, and some students followed him
→ The teacher walked out of the lab,(with) some students following him.
→ The teacher,followedby some students, walked out of the lab.
(2)When false is taken for true, true becomes false.
→Withfalse taken for true, true becomes false.
→False taken for true, true becomes false.
(3) I thought that his solution might be wrong. I carefully analyzed the problem. I tried to work it out in a different way.
→ Thinking that his solution might be wrong, I carefully analyzed the problem and tried to work it out in a different way.
05修辞手法不可少
(1)To finish the work ahead of time, they have been busy recently.
→ To accomplish the work ahead of time, they have beenas busy as a beerecently.
(2)Beijing held the opening ceremony of the 29thOlympic Games successfully at August 8th, 2008.
→ August 8th, 2008sawBeijing holding the opening ceremony of the 29th Olympic Games successfully.
(3) We must take effective measures to handle / tackle the problem.
→Effective measures must be takento handle / tackle the problem.
（4）Of the two, I think the latter is the better.
→ Of the two, the latterwinsmy favor.
(5) Reading canenrichour mind,enlargeour horizons,and matureour personality.Humor help usbearour burdens,lessenour tension,overcomeour frustration,relaxourselves,and makelife easier.Manystudents,if not most, find it impossible to resist the temptation to indulge themselves inplayinggames,enjoyingromance with girls, or killingtime passively in the dorms. When it approaches graduation, as a result, they find their academic records less impressive.
06仿写——似是而非
(1)A is to B what / as C is to D
A book is to the mind what food is to the body.A positive attitude is to life what the sun is to the earth.Honesty is to the people as life is to the creature.Cleanness is to the can teen what water is to the fish.
(2) Helen is the most beautiful girl.
→ Helen is one of the most beautiful girls.
→ Helen is one of the most beautiful girls that I have ever seen.
→ No one is more beautiful than Helen in the world.Nothing is more important thanhealth, because without good health, we would have nothing, including happiness.Nothing is more important thanhonesty, because without honesty, we would have nothing, including love and even success.Nothing is more important thanfriends, because without friends, we would have nothing, including happiness.
(3) Dream never fails to enable us to be a better pilot of our life.Diligencenever fails toenable us to be a better pilot of languages.Lovenever fails toenable us to be a better pilot of our family.A sincere heartnever fails toenable us to be a better pilot of our friends.Women are usually attracted by beautiful clothes.Beautiful clothes always catch women’s eyes.Beautiful clothesnever fail tofascinate women.Adsnever fail toexert a tremendous fascination on people.Examsnever fail toexert tremendous pressure on us students.A reasonable educational systemnever fails toexert a positive influence on our country.
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